NO FRUIT - NO SWEET VEGGIES................CUT THINGS INTO A
Raw broccoli 5 spears = 11 cals
Raw Spinach 1 leaf = 2 cals
1 medium sized pickle = 12 cals
Lettuce - 1 leaf = 1 cal
1 cup vegetable broth 15 cals... double check every time for each brand of course.
1 tbsp balsamic vinegar = 10 cals
In no particular order:
A Guide to Recognizing Your Saints
An American Crime
The Basketball Diaries
Bastard Out of Carolina
Boy's Don't Cry
The Breakfast Club
Brothers of the Head
The Butterfly Effect
The Five People You Meet in Heaven
The Heart Is Deceitful Above All Things
Joe the King
Kiss Kiss Bang Bang
Life as a House
Song for a Raggy Boy
Tom Brown's School Days
Turn the River
cider house rules
Friday night lights
To Kill a Mockingbird
A history of violence
The Good Son
Walk The line
James and the Giant Peach
I read, or heard, somewhere that to make writing as clear and powerful as possible one should take out as many descriptive '-ly' adjectives as one can.
I think this is valuable information. Of course, everyone's style is their own and does not have to stick to these guidelines at all (becasue there is no problem with telling a 'ly'... sorry, lame.).
But the difference is impressive. The trick is that what my goal would be, in doing this, is to replace normal 'ly' + verb = description with a verb that is accurate enough and powerful enough to convey the point on its own.
"The little girl bound out with her braided hair slapping against her back violently."
This could be exchanged with: "The little girl bound out with her braided hair slapping her back like exclamatory pats of congratulations."
Sure, a confused sentence. There are probably much better examples out there. It then becomes, however, a decision between utlra-description or simplicity. Go for simplicity if you're in the middle of something fast-paced. Other than that. You're on your own.
I am actually over 8000 words for the short story, and the rough draft of it is complete - and wiggy- and I am going to start editing it soon. I have some tips for editing that I am looking at. I am trying ot eventually make the ultimate editing technique guide thingamajig which I can use for everything (though half the fun is in the search and capture of the techniques).
Here's what I have that's new, obvious, but interesting anyway.
- Reveal the character(s) constantly throughout the story.
- Make it easy for the reader - explain your references and big words (subtley) but at the same time make the reader feel smarter.
-Read from the bottom of the page up to catch all spelling and grammar accidents without getting caught up in the work.
- Work with a ruler like a little kid to slow your focus and not skip anything.
- Likewise, touch each word with a pencil to make sure you don't skip over it.
- Double check for words you commonly mispell. Spell-check is not going to find the difference between Form and From or To, Too, Two, tutu (you know =D)
Finally, interestingly phrased:
- Skim out all teh fat from the story to make it exciting and fast-paced - agility in a short story is key to the reader's interest in your work.